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Silver water, like liquid glass


Staring back through a faceless mask


A soundless voice that echoes through the silence


Whispers of unspoken thirst


Cold hands pressed against the mew


Teasing jingles, keys just out of reach


Faltered hope and gaped faith 


A jacket tight, wrapped around heart


Mind muddled in illusions of escapism

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This is probably one of the very few times I've written a poem with a solid thought to convey; most of the time I just sling words together so they fit and throw it up, letting you guys decide what you want it to mean.

In this poem, the 'person' is struggling against inner-turmoil and self conflict without someone to talk to.

I know its probably and overused concept, but eh.

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:iconunknown-sources:
Is might be a overused concept, but it's real and people relate to this!
Well written! :)
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:iconancientpoet:
Good title and well put :)
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~Cataclystiq Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"Whispers of unspoken thirst", -not being able to express his/her inner thoughts-couldn't have been expressed any better in terms of personification! 5/5!
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~februaryblue Nov 13, 2012  Student Writer
It personally reminded me of impossibility. "Silver water", "thirst", "teasing jingles, keys just out of reach" portrayed a sense of something that narrator wants that keeps slipping away from them. Admittedly I didn't see the intended meaning in the poem, though.
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:iconstarmic:
Amazing poem, just warth my soul some how...
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*Everlasting90 Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm not good at critiques, but this was really amazing. Everytime this person gets his/her hopes up, the way to the freedom of this inner torture, it's just imaginary. This kind of reminds me of a myth where three men were punished by Zeus and everytime they tried to escape, they couldn't. It was an endless cycle.
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